diff --git a/remote-present.sh b/remote-present.sh
index 1103632..2cf60fb 100755
--- a/remote-present.sh
+++ b/remote-present.sh
@@ -25,6 +25,10 @@ h3() {
     echo $1 | toilet --gay -f mini
 }
 
+rainbow() {
+    echo $1 | toilet --gay -f term
+}
+
 trap : 2
 
 ## NOW WE"RE REMOTING
@@ -33,68 +37,21 @@ h1 " we're on bunkchat now"
 append
 h3 incredible
 append
-echo "so like what's here?"
-echo "(that we could meaningfully engage with in <5 minutes?)"
-
-##
-newslide
-h3 "the halp file"
-append
-set -x
-halp
-{ set +x; } 2>/dev/null
-
-append
-h1 "and now"
-append
-h2 "the point of this presentation"
+echo "so like where's that demo?"
 
 newslide
-toilet -w 100 -f block --gay bunkchat | tr "_|" "~#"
-
-newslide
-echo "it's chat in a file"
-
-set -x
-proclaim
-{ set +x; } 2>/dev/null
+toilet -w 100 -f block --gay bunkdeck | tr "_|" "~#"
 append
-echo "where indeed?"
-append
-set -x
-heed
-{ set +x; } 2>/dev/null
-append
-echo "okay i think i get it"
-append
-set -x
-scry
-{ set +x; } 2>/dev/null
-append
-echo "one command to proclaim and another to heed?"
-echo "surely there's a better way!"
-append
-echo "maybe you could..."
-newslide
-h3 "multiplex?"
-
-append
-lynx https://i.pinimg.com/originals/99/7e/f8/997ef8aee6af0885257000a0ad3170ba.jpg 1>/dev/null
-
-newslide
-echo "but remember! some of us are new to the terminal!"
-
+echo "i thought you said bunk chat?"
 append
 set -x
 bunkdeck
 { set +x; } 2>/dev/null
 
-h1 enough!
-h2 "yr 5 minutes is almost done!"
+newslide
+echo "okay it's chat"
 append
-h3 "show some code!"
-append
-echo "okay"
+h1 "let's see some code already"
 
 newslide
 echo "there's some code for writing"
@@ -105,16 +62,55 @@ echo "and some code for reading"
 append
 less ~/code/bunkchat/heed
 newslide
-echo "and, of course the tmux scripting"
+echo "the install script includes an important piece of how this all works"
+append
+less ~/code/bunkchat/install.sh
+newslide
+echo "that's a load-bearing"
+rainbow "`chattr +a`"
+
+newslide
+echo "before i explain the name, check this out:"
+set -x
+proclaim
+{ set +x; } 2>/dev/null
+append
+echo "where indeed?"
+append
+set -x
+heed
+{ set +x; } 2>/dev/null
+append
+echo "utterly uninteractive"
+
+newslide
+echo "that stuff is 'bunkchat' - the core pieces"
+echo "and this is 'bunkdeck' - terminal multiplexing made easy"
 append
 less ~/code/bunkdeck/bunkdeck
 newslide
-echo "the install script includes an important piece of how this all works"
+h2 "multi-user server"
 append
-less ~/code/bunchat/install.sh
-append
-echo "that's a load-bearing `chattr +a`"
+echo "users with varied experience and comfort with a terminal"
+echo "can love a tui"
 newslide
+echo "old tools"
+append
+h3 "nostalgia?"
+newslide
+h2 "no"
+append
+h3 "learning?"
+newslide
+h2 "yes!"
+h2 "and fun!"
+echo "i remote into this server all the time"
+append
+echo "and there's not even a page"
+
+newslide
+echo "discalimer:"
+echo "bunkchat is probably"
 h2 "not for low trust servers"
 append
 h3 "we're all friends here"
diff --git a/tilde-present.sh b/tilde-present.sh
index 2db0f48..2c19fa8 100755
--- a/tilde-present.sh
+++ b/tilde-present.sh
@@ -43,79 +43,24 @@ h2 "group chat in a file"
 
 newslide
 
-## INTRO TO TILDE
-
-h2 "what's tilde"
-
-## define tilde
-newslide
-
-h3 "a tilde is a server!"
-append
-echo "it's also maybe a fuzzy concept?"
-echo
-echo "a tilde server"
-append
-echo "  SHOULD be public access"
-append
-echo "  SHOULD unix"
-append
-rainbow '  SHOULD give users a website'
-append
-echo
-echo "like..."
-
-## some websites
-newslide
-set -x
-preparetopaste https://bunk.computer/~winter
-lynx https://bunk.computer/~oxaliq
-{ set +x; } 2>/dev/null
-
-append
-h2 "pretty cool right?"
-
 ## bunk.computer
 newslide
-h1 "enter bunk"
-
-h2 "a computer club"
+h2 "why group chat in a file?"
 
 append
-echo "buncombe county is the source of \"bunkum\""
-echo "hence bunk.com.pu.ter"
-
-## learning! not nostalgia
-newslide
-echo "users of varied cli expertise"
-rainbow "who just like hanging out and doing cool things with computers"
+echo "friends who just like hanging out and doing cool things with computers"
 append
-h3 "nostalgia?"
-newslide
-h2 "no"
-append
-h3 "learning?"
-newslide
-h2 "yes!"
-
-## go to bunk.computer
-newslide
-h3 "so?"
-h2 "can we go to bunk.computer?"
-append
-h1 "let's go!"
+rainbow "meeting together on one computer"
 
 newslide
+h2 "on to the demo"
 set -x
 preparetopaste "cd code/rc-presentation; ./remote-present.sh"
 ssh oxaliq@bunk.computer 2>/dev/null || echo "hurray!"
 { set +x; } 2>/dev/null
 
-
-
 ## TUNNELING!
 
-
 ## AND WE"RE BACK
 append
 rainbow "and we're back in rc"
@@ -130,13 +75,14 @@ append
 rainbow "https://git.bunk.computer/bunkdeck"
 
 newslide
-newslide
+echo "what is tilde server?"
+rainbow "https://tildeverse.org/"
+append
 echo "more computer club stuff"
 rainbow "https://wiki.bunk.computer"
+
 # END
 newslide
-
 h1 "fin"
-
 newslide
 exit 0